Monday, June 23, 2008

The Boy That is Always Late For School (yuehean)

One fine night, a boy that always Sleep At night and always be late for school, Called Peter. When he came back from school, He would immediately on the computer and the television. He played and watched till 12 o'clock and the school always start lessons at 7.15

The next day, It was 7.10 and Peter had not even eaten his breakfast! But when he just went out of his house, It was already 7.15! He was late again.Diiinnnggg, Dooonnnggg, Diiinnnggg, Dooonnnggg. The teacher had started the lesson but Peter was still walking to school!

When it was almost recess, Peter had just reached the school. The teacher had scolded him for almost 30mins and punished him that he was not going for recess for 3 weeks. He was not happy, so he was trying to sleep at 11o'clock from then onwards and he was sorry for coming late to school and could not go recess for 3 weeks. Everyday, when he came back from school, he would ask his mother to cook more rice for 3 weeks.

His mother was surprised that why he ate more rice. He told his mother that he was late for school so that his teacher had banned him from going to recess.

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

good story but quite a number of mistakes

-Zeeshan

SafiahArshad's Antics! said...

You are right Zeeshan. This would make a good story but too many mistakes to make it be read fluently. Pls make the necessary changes Yue Hean. :-)

SafiahArshad's Antics! said...

All right Yue Hean. I made the necessary changes. Do read and see what are your mistakes..

Anonymous said...

I dont get your 1st paragraph and i agree with zeeshan u know....

Anonymous said...

lol funny story you got there. But there was a number of mistake in the 1st paragraph.





From, Abbas

Anonymous said...

You need to have a more complete ending.
Elaine

irsyad said...

you shoulden use "One fine night"because it sounded so boring!-.-

ken lim said...

you should put 7.15 p.m. not 7.15!

Anonymous said...

a number of mistakes but interesting.