TOMMY'S FIRST GIFT Once, there was a boy named Tommy. He had never received a gift from anyone before. This makes him upset as he longed to get a gift, a small one at least, from someone, especially on his birthday. He prayed hard every day. On On In class, Tommy could not concentrate on his studies. He remained quiet in class. His teacher named Ms Safiah noticed that Tommy is not as cheerful as before. Knowing John is Tommy's best friend, she asked John. John told her. Ms Safiah had an idea. During recess, Tommy has no appetite to eat or play with his friends. He just drank some water. After recess, when everyone is back in class, Ms Safiah call Tommy to come in front of the class.. Tommy thought he has made a mistake. Suddenly Ms Safiah took out a present from her bag and gave to Tommy. She asked all students in the class to sing birthday song for Tommy. What a surprise for Tommy. Tommy was so happy that he thanked Ms Safiah and all his classmates. Tommy went home feeling happy. When he reached home, another surprise came. His mother has ordered pizza from Canadian Pizza specially for his birthday. Wow, Tommy's happiness doubled this year. His prayer was heared. The End |
Tuesday, June 24, 2008
Tommy's First Gift (Writen by Aiman)
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13 comments:
The story is great
nabilah
Wow.. I love reading your story too.. .There were a few grammar mistakes though. Your story should be written in past tense. I hope you can spot them and make changes. Or maybe your friends can spot them for you.. :-)
like ur story
This story is very interesting but, i think u repeated 2 sentences 2 times.
Nur Syahirah
Umm its intresting but why did u repeat 1 sentence 2 times i agree with syahirah though.....
-satria
I like your story, it's great
Yong Xuan
its great and i know 14 may is your birthday
Teck Tiam
Your story was great.
Elaine
Wow Aiman the boy have a happy ending and the story is intresting.
a wonderful story!i like your story!its a sad and meaningful story!thumps up!
The story was great.Itreminded me of my first gift that I have.
i agree with satria.
I am sorry if there are mistakes everyone. But I hope all of you like my story.
Mystery Guy = Aiman
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