Tuesday, June 24, 2008

Tommy's First Gift (Writen by Aiman)

TOMMY'S FIRST GIFT

Once, there was a boy named Tommy. He had never received a gift from anyone before. This makes him upset as he longed to get a gift, a small one at least, from someone, especially on his birthday. He prayed hard every day.

On 14th May 2008, that is Tommy's birthday, he went to school feeling sad. He knows that his birthday be just any other day, nothing special will come to him. He cried on his way to school.

On 14th May 2008, Tommy forgets that it is his birthday as he never receives a gift or wish from someone before. He does not want to remember his birthday anymore because he felt his birthday is just like any other day, nothing special ever come to him. Tommy went to school with sad feeling. He cried on his way to school. When he reached his school, his best friend John noticed his sad face. John asked Tommy why is he sad. Tommy told John why.

In class, Tommy could not concentrate on his studies. He remained quiet in class. His teacher named Ms Safiah noticed that Tommy is not as cheerful as before. Knowing John is Tommy's best friend, she asked John. John told her. Ms Safiah had an idea. During recess, Tommy has no appetite to eat or play with his friends. He just drank some water.

After recess, when everyone is back in class, Ms Safiah call Tommy to come in front of the class.. Tommy thought he has made a mistake. Suddenly Ms Safiah took out a present from her bag and gave to Tommy. She asked all students in the class to sing birthday song for Tommy. What a surprise for Tommy. Tommy was so happy that he thanked Ms Safiah and all his classmates.

Tommy went home feeling happy. When he reached home, another surprise came. His mother has ordered pizza from Canadian Pizza specially for his birthday. Wow, Tommy's happiness doubled this year. His prayer was heared.

The End

13 comments:

Anonymous said...

The story is great

nabilah

SafiahArshad's Antics! said...

Wow.. I love reading your story too.. .There were a few grammar mistakes though. Your story should be written in past tense. I hope you can spot them and make changes. Or maybe your friends can spot them for you.. :-)

Anonymous said...

like ur story

sYaHiRaH said...

This story is very interesting but, i think u repeated 2 sentences 2 times.

Nur Syahirah

Anonymous said...

Umm its intresting but why did u repeat 1 sentence 2 times i agree with syahirah though.....


-satria

Anonymous said...

I like your story, it's great

Yong Xuan

Anonymous said...

its great and i know 14 may is your birthday

Teck Tiam

Anonymous said...

Your story was great.
Elaine

Anonymous said...

Wow Aiman the boy have a happy ending and the story is intresting.

irsyad said...

a wonderful story!i like your story!its a sad and meaningful story!thumps up!

Anonymous said...

The story was great.Itreminded me of my first gift that I have.

ken lim said...

i agree with satria.

Mystery Guy said...

I am sorry if there are mistakes everyone. But I hope all of you like my story.

Mystery Guy = Aiman