Monday, June 23, 2008

The Grave House (By Lee Kia Wee)

It was a stormy night. The thunder crashed and lightning roared. I was left alone at home watching some television shows while waiting for my parents to come back from work.Suddenly, I heard someone playing with my toy drum. I dashed down to see who that was. When I got down, I saw nobody but my drum and drumsticks lying on the floor. I picked them up and put them back to my music box.

Then I saw a small girl standing outside my window with its mouth sealed. I was shocked to see that. I closed my eye and counted to ten. When I opened my eyes, the girl disappeared. I ran into my room and locked the door.

Suddenly, I heard someone knocking on the door. I thought that it was my parents but it was not. When I went down and opened the door, I was shocked to see that it was a woman with blood all around her face. She came in, sat on my sofa, turned on the TV, and watched. I closed my eyes and wished that she would be gone. I dashed into the room and locked the door.

Soon my father and mother came back home. I told them what happened and they said that before this house was built, it was a graveyard.We decided to leave the spirit alone in the house.

11 comments:

Anonymous said...

OMG Kia Wee Did you just repeat the IT WAS A STORMY NIGHT next time dont do the same mistake lolz

BY SATRIA

irsyad said...

A marvallous story!A very tensed story.i love your story!But you should not put "it was a story night" because it sounded a bit akward.But so far so gd!Keep up the gd work!BRAVO!

sYaHiRaH said...

A very nice,short and simple story with some amazing adjectives but the story is quite creepy to me.Kp up with ur gd wrk!

SafiahArshad's Antics! said...

I made the change for Kia Wee already Satria. Thanks for noticing.. :-)

Irsyad, there was a mistake on Kia Wee's part. Thank you for noticing that. He made the change and changed it to "stormy".. :-)

Yes Syahirah.His use of adjectives are great! I love it too! Even Mdm Irwani loves his story too! The way he describes is marvellous!!

Ms Safiah

Anonymous said...

very good.

-Zeeshan

Anonymous said...

hiyas,your story was.. scary! But it was very nice.
-Minjun

Anonymous said...

Your voice is loud and clear,Kia Wee.

Anonymous said...

It is a scary story and it gives me the creeps.
Elaine

Anonymous said...

The story was good and simple but a little scary.Omigod,it even gave me goosebumps!

ken lim said...

It is intersting but a little scarry.

Anonymous said...

i did not saw this type of stories before