Saturday, July 05, 2008

Situational Writing 2 (by Syafiq)

One Saturday, sounds of excitement are heard at Hussein's four-storey high semi-detached house. Hussein and Aisha were excited because they were going to the Fun-a-fair at TKPS!

They were so happy that they kept talking about the Fun-a-fair. They were lucky because Hussein paid $3,000 for six hundred tickets. Before they set off to Telok Kurau Primary, the make sure that they have brought the tickets. Then, they started up the engine of the nine-seater, Hybrid, MPV Mercedes Benz Viano Sport. It was a one-and-a-half hour ride.

They felt even more excited whenever the car overtook a car.
Finally, when they reached there at 0930 hours, the y immediately went to the inflatables and bounced up and down at the inflatable castle. Then, they went to the "Soccer Shootout" at the Basketball Court. Since Hussein was a professional soccer player, he was good at scoring goals easily. Finally, Hussein's team won 7-1 by Aisha's team. They ate cup noodles and said that it was delicious. They felt happy about the games.

On their way to visit their cousins' place, they still kept talking about the Fun-a-fair. Then they joked around all the way until they reached Choa Chu Kang and told them about the funfair.

12 comments:

Anonymous said...

very good . the way u described the car.

Anonymous said...

yep!!!i agree with zeeshan...........

SafiahArshad's Antics! said...

Nice story. You decribed what is at the funfair quite well.. .:-)

Anonymous said...

wonderfull!!!i really agree with ZEESHAN.

Anonymous said...

Woah...i agree with everyone its a good story

satria

Anonymous said...

Your story is great and i argee with Zeeshan

Anonymous said...

good

Anonymous said...

u describe things well!bravo!

By your friend
Ben

Anonymous said...

erms the sentence they will remember to take the tickets...you wrote the they become the.zzzzzzz

Anonymous said...

your story is wonderful,I like the way you described the car.li jun

Anonymous said...

Good work

syafiq said...

Thx for ur comments