Saturday, July 05, 2008

situational writing (by Teck Tiam )

All Saturday, Hussein and his sister Aisha were so excited that they could not think and talk of nothing else. Their parents had promised to take them to the fun fair at Fort Canning Green!

When they are in Fort Canning Green fun fair, Hussein wants to play the ping pong games. At last, Hussein won the first prize and it was a very big teddy bear. His sister also wants the big teddy bear, so she keep trying but she still can't get the teddy bear.

After that,Aisha cried. So , Aisha and Hussein's parents help Aisha to get that teddy bear. At last, their parents go them a dolphin . Aisha smiled. Aisha stop crying and said " thank you " to her parents.

When it was at night , they went home. They have a happy sleeping .

10 comments:

Anonymous said...

Good and simple but not bad!

Anonymous said...

thanks, diyanah

Anonymous said...

teck tiam did u try to say "at last their parents got her a dolphin" ?


Drago = satria

Anonymous said...

I agree with Satria

Anonymous said...

short but not bad

Anonymous said...

Maybe your last paragraph can add

longer.......

Anonymous said...

anonymoys=Ben

Mystery Guy said...

Your story is good.

Mystery=Aiman

Anonymous said...

GOOD STORY BUT A FEW MISTAKES

Anonymous said...

good story!