Fun-A-Fair Going On
All Saturday, Hussein and Aisha were so excited they could think or talk of nothing else. Their parents had promised to take them to the funfair. Their parents had promised them to take them to the funfair because they got 100 MARKS for their exam. their mother said:'the funfair will be going to be at Saturday'.After five days, Hussein and Aisha wanted to go there to the funfair early in the morning but their parents was still sleeping. They decided to take a shower first. Then, their parents wake up at nine o'clock. Hussein and Aisha went there after their parents had shower. Five minutes gone. They reach at their own school. They found out that there are games , foods, drinks and more. They decided to play the games first. They play and play until they got tired.
'Everybody, thank you for coming, the funfair will be closed now', the principle said. Hussein and Aisha were so excited until they wished to come again.
11 comments:
sorry that i did not put the 'a' in my story.
Ken,
I don't think your composition has paragraphs. It is like as if the whole story in one paragraph.
Story 2 boring!I m feeling sleepy right now.
syafiq!Ya got that right!It really looks as if its in one paragraph,ya got dat right.
Well, he now has his paragraphs.. :-).. It was no seen previously because of the formatting.. :-)
Ms Safiah
N one more thing, repeat"their parents had promised to take them to de fun fair".It makes de story boring!
very nice story you have there Ken!!!!!But,playing can play until tired?Means that they play for a loooooooooooooong time!!!1
it is a nice story
Nice story but you can do better
Nice story but you can do better
nice story but I think you can do better.
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