Thursday, July 03, 2008

situational writing (by Zeeshan)

All Saturday Hussein and Aisha were so excited they could not think and talk of nothing else. Their parents had promised to take them to take them to the fun fair.

At about two p.m., their father drove them there. They were so happy. They decided to ride the roller coaster first. They went to get their tickets and joined the queue. When it was their turn they got on and buckled up. The roller coaster started moving and suddenly the roller coaster stopped moving.

The person in charge took out his hand phone and called the fire department. In a few minutes they came and got their ladder ready. One by one they all came down mostly with sad faces.

But Hussein and Aisha came down looking very happy. Their father asked them why and they said they were happy because they still came. The fun fair had to close for repairs. But would open two months later.




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12 comments:

SafiahArshad's Antics! said...

Thanks Zeeshan for uploading your story... :-)

For your last paragraph, try not to start with "But"...

Other than that, I would say it is quite interesting...

sYaHiRaH said...

yep!i think i agree with ms safiah!!!
but a wonderful story!!!!!!!!!

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Anonymous said...

i agree with them

Anonymous said...

your story is quite nice but if can write longer also good

Mystery Guy said...

your story is fantastic zeeshan, keep it up.

mystery guy=Aiman

Anonymous said...

not bad.
diyanah

Anonymous said...

"Their parents had promised to take them to take them to the fun fair."

what does it mean?

Anonymous said...

i like urs

satria

Anonymous said...

geeat story

Anonymous said...

I mean 'GREAT STORY'

nasmenem said...

quite short