All Saturday, Hussein and Aisha were so excited they could think and talk of nothing else. Their parents had promised to take them to the funfair! The funfair was at the Botanical Garden. It was a very decent place.
All of a sudden, the inflatable that Hussein and Aisha were playing on went out of air. The children on the inflatable got a shock because they were falling from about thirty meters high with the huge inflatable that they were playing on.
The manager also got a shock to see the children falling with the inflatable. He called for some workers to come and help to pump back the air again and give the children free ice cream because they did not do their duty to look after the inflatable.
The children were very happy that they got a free ice cream and they did not get injured.
19 comments:
The story was great! Keep up the good work!
nice story i love that inflatable part kp up your gd wrk
Drago-satria
great story
luv the story!good job and keep up the good work!
this sentence is quite funny look;
He called for some workers to come and help to pump back the air again and give the children free ice cream because they did not do their duty to look after the inflatable.
i think this part is funny because you said,to help them pump bCK AND GIVE THE CHILDREN FREE ICE CREAM B'COS
THEY DID NOT DO THEIR DUTY TO LOOK AFTER THE INFLATIBLE
good jog
your story will be more interesting if u add this sentence
'some kids got shock till they faint,some children had a serious injury
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Thank you for your comments
by the writer:Juzar
Short but good!
WOW! Your story is really intresting.LIJUN
GOOD STORY
Well done Juzar,
I love reading your composition piece.. :-)
Keep up your good work.. ;-)
good!
i like your story it is amazing!!!
Wow!
Congratulations! You have done a very good composition! :)
A very good story because I do not see any grammar and spelling mistakes. The story is very interesting.
its good if its longer
hanif
Excellent job!!!!!
Excellent job!!!
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